My indignation
I have very things that annoy me, the disrespect between the people and the indifference to the situations important of the present. But, of all that, I feel really outraged when I realize that the country in which I live gives television spaces to public figures that used them to discriminate other persons.
The confrontation between the conductor of the program, “El interruptor”, José Miguel Villouta and the “Pastor Soto” is and example of that. I think that people like this “Pastor” have public spaces is dangerous for the construction of a more respectful nation.
What makes the situation worse, for me, is that his ideas also represents to a presidential candidate, José Antonio Kast. It may seem like a isolated case but it is really an example of the violence that some people have to live every day for their sexual orientation, only for who they are.
I would like to live in an inclusive country that values people, because all that matters is that they are people with feelings, experiences and rights that have been oppressed for centuries. I dream with a different nation, a different world in which all of us have the sames consideration.
The text on the overall has a smooth flow that is disrupted for some problems with word choice and subject verb agreement which in some cases may obscure the message coing through.
ResponderBorrarCorrection:
very things that annoy= many things that annoy
the disrespect between the people= the disrespect among people
that used them to discriminate other persons= check on coherence of this sentence
this “Pastor” have public spaces = this "Pastor" having public spaces
ideas also represents= ideas also represent
like a isolated case = like an isolated
T: 2, L: 2,5, G; 2,5= 7 pts.
Grade: 5,5